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    The first day they met was an epic disaster.

    Aleks cursed at the male barista behind the cash register for receiving the wrong coffee—decaf instead of his usual double shot espresso. He yelled so much that tears began to run down the young worker’s face before she appeared. In a flurry of wild red hair and jangling bangles, she swept the poor barista aside and stood firmly on the other side of the counter with a wide smile. “What seems to be the problem, sir?”

    He yelled at her too. Something along the lines of “liquefied crap for coffee,” and “I know animals that are better trained than all of you!” She continued to smile and nod, her bracelets rattling when she lifted her arm to brush a red curl from her eyes. Aleks walked away with a free espresso to down on the long subway ride to his work and a scowl that dissuaded everyone from getting too close.

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    The second day they met was barely any better.

    Aleks had been the unlucky customer behind the one that complained this time. He tapped his foot impatiently, checking the large face of his watch every ten seconds, while the woman in front of him screeched about having the wrong muffin. He had almost been forced to leave without his coffee when a red blur shot past him.

    He blinked, and there was the young woman, smiling and gently pushing another barista to the back as she solved the problem. He stepped up after the irate woman left with a muffin to her satisfaction, and the red headed barista took his order with the same smile. He left the café without pause, hurrying to catch the subway on time.

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    The third day they met was on a good day.

    Aleks had woken up when his first alarm rang; he had hot water to shower with instead of the perpetual cold; and no one had stopped him on the way down from his apartment to yell about rent.

    He entered the café a full half hour early, when only the early birds managed to wake up enough to venture out for their morning cup of energy. She stood behind the cash register with a pen balanced in one hand and a notebook in the other.

    She put them away and smiled when Aleks stepped up to place his order. He barely glanced at her as he rattled off his order, and he accepted the insulated cup with the same amount of care.

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    The tenth day they met was different.

    Aleks stepped up to order his coffee when the red head said, “The usual, right?”

    He blinked and stared at her, but she moved to fix his double-shot espresso without another word. He stood in silence and listened to her bangles while she flowed behind the counter. He paid for the coffee after her prompting and walked out without pausing to check if the order had been made correctly.

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    The twentieth day they met, he asked her a question.

    “How long have you worked here?”

    The barista continued to punch his order into the cash register, and Aleks handed over his credit card when she held out her hand. She swiped it on the machine and gave it back to him. “A year now. I need you to sign this.”

    Aleks took the pen she offered and scribbled on the small slip of paper she slid towards him. “That’s not possible. I’ve never seen you before a few weeks ago.”

    She took the paper and pen and stashed them beneath the counter. She slid his espresso across the counter for him to take and smiled, her bracelets tinkling together. “You just never looked.”

    Aleks glanced down at the nametag pinned to her apron before he stepped aside for the next customer. Corrinne gave the same smile to that customer, and Aleks left to catch the subway.

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    The thirtieth day they met, Aleks used her name.

    “Thanks, Corrinne.”

    Corinne paused for a short moment, folding the slip of paper he signed to store it away. Her smile slightly fell before lifting again. “You’re very welcome, sir.”

    “Aleks. You can call me Aleks.”

    “Well then, you’re very welcome, Sir Aleks.”

    Aleks almost missed the subway because he stayed for a second cup of espresso.

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    The forty-fifth day they met, it was at a different time.

    Aleks arrived at the café much later than usual. His alarm had not gone off that morning, and he had been unable to visit the café for his usual. He had watched the clock all day and clocked out the moment it turned five o’clock. The subway had been cramped, per usual, but he had stepped off one stop before his apartment.

    Corrine stood outside the café when he arrived and looked up at the sound of her name. She didn’t smile, and the bangles didn’t chime when she deliberately moved her arms to lock the door. Aleks gasped for breath, having run all the way from the subway, and he swiped a hand across his brow. “Sorry I’m late.”

    The woman tilted her head to the side and crossed her arms. “I thought you had found a different café.”

    Aleks smiled, which spurred a small smile to cross Corrinne’s lips. “None of the other cafes know my usual.”

~

    The seven-hundred and fifty-fifth day they met, it was in a different place.

    Aleks stood at the end of the long aisle and attempted to stand still. The high collar he wore itched, and the long sleeves of his suit jacket made the heat of the large room all the more uncomfortable. He could feel the eyes of everyone sitting on either side of the room on him.

    They turned as the organ behind him began to play. Aleks stood straighter as the door at the end of the aisle swung open. Three couples walked down the aisle, but it was the last pair that held his attention. Corrine returned his large smile from the arm of her father as she marched down the aisle in time to the organ.                                       

    Aleks held out his hand when she reached him, and the colorful bracelets he had given Corrine over the past two years jingled.  

Fear my romantic skillz! Dummy uuggh 

My final entry for theWrittenRevolution's Game of Genres Contest. For the last week, we had the choice between Romance or Horror. Originally, I was planning on doing something with Horror, but I waited too long to even think about that. Instead, I attempted the other genre I'm weak in: Romance.  It's pretty short this week (only a 1050 word count), but at least I managed to get something written in time I think I've fainted.  
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Given 2016-07-09
Days (Short Story) by LeaderPinhead shows us two people who, by way of small interactions, grow closer and closer as the days go on. ( Suggested by doughboycafe and Featured by brennenxr )
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2016   Writer
I don't say "Awww!" out loud very often when I read, but this one did it. What a sweet story. I can't help but mentally fill in the blanks between all the days you describe. Such a sweet love story.
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2016   Writer
Oy. I definitely wrote almost the same sentence twice in my comment. It must be late o'clock.
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kecharagrl Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2016
More please! This is fantastic!
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Inkatra Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
A very sweet and simple story. Gave me a tingly happy feeling at the end (: Well deserved DD~
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2016  Student Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
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PenguinTranquilizer Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! :la:
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Thanks! :meow:
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PenguinTranquilizer Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome! :)
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pineleaf2778 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
That was so cute!
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D
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Andorada Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016
Awwww :aww:
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Meow Love 
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aww so sweet :aww:!!  
Congratulations on your much deserved DD!
Congrats on DD By Marphilhearts by LindArtz
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
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L-u-n-e Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD!!!!!! Beautiful written and beautiful story!
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Thanks! I am a dummy! 
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! :DALove: by Ikue
Have a nice day! :love: by CookiemagiK
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Thanks! La la la la 
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Lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
My Pleasure (1) by daniya-ART
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Gio-R Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016  Hobbyist
That's so sweet *.* I like the story and I like how it is written :)
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D (Big Grin) 
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Bomberhead67 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2016
This was great, better than most DD stories I'd say.
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2016  Student Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D (Big Grin) 
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2015  Professional Writer
Here is that crit I owe you. Really I don't have much to say in the way of critique. All three winners of the contest weeks have been pretty strong and tightly woven stories. Clearly this is no exception. I liked the flow, found myself sucked in, and didn't find anything that I 'tripped' over so to speak. It was also an original take on romance- no love at first sight, no flash, no sparks, just a realistic and relatable story about people who meet, and meet, and meet until a bond forms over time. I liked that about it. And I dig the style, kind of a straightforward, minimalist deal, so good job. It was an easy fav.
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IcySkittles Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2015
*lets out a squeal that kills all ears*

Awwwwwwww! :love:

:iconblushplz: This was possibly one of the most romantic short stories that I've ever read. No exaggeration! :iconloveitplz:

I really like the repetition here. It gives off a really neat and remarkable emphasis. The way that they met and everything just oozed with bittersweetness or just sweetness in general. I'm absorbed with your writing style, personally it just seems so elegant.

By the way, congratulations on getting first place in the Written Revolution! :clap:
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2015  Student Writer
Thank you so much for the feedback! Romance is a weak spot for me, so hearing someone enjoyed this little piece is definitely a confidence booster :XD: I've just started trying out this type of style too, so another confidence booster!Llama Emoji-02 (Blush) [V1] 

And thank you once more! I never win at contests like those, so it was a happy shock :happybounce: 
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2015   Writer
Nice starting paragraph -- it cracks a punch :) you got me interested in your characters quickly. The very first line was a good choice, I think.

The story itself is down-to-earth and relatable, not flowery at all which makes the romance more believable and interesting. :D I like the shift in their relationship on the tenth day. You worked that in so very elegantly. The twentieth day is both a little sad and heartwarming. Aww, and the ending is super sweet!

You're not weak in Romance. :) Ths short story was great. Detailed enough to give an impression, and yet sparse in words, making it an easy read. Each sentence needed to be there, each sentence held meaning. It's fantastic. And in each encounter they had, you showed me something negative about their relationship, which made me worry about their happy ending, and made me want to read on to the next part. Until the end, which was rewarding. :) So good job. I hope you write more romances in the future, you're good at it.
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LeaderPinhead Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2015  Student Writer
Thank you so much for the feedback! :D I don't write romance very often (because what I do write comes out super cheesy or super awkward or super "What the hell are these characters doing to each other?!"), so to hear that this short little story turned out so well from at least one person makes me super giddy. Maybe I'll even give another try in the future :XD:
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2015   Writer
No worries :) your story isn't cheesy or awkward at all. While reading, I had a sense of "this writer knows what they're doing", and I read a lot of romance :blush: so I can see you are a good romance writer.
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